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Marching up and down the Square by Vector-Brony Marching up and down the Square by Vector-Brony
This is based off a Monty Python Sketch which I love to bits
The Oc in this comic belongs to :iconnos212:

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:iconmaplekitty34:
Wow this is adorable AND hilarious! The style is quite nice in it's self, and I don't quite see any problems with it. The shading is nice, and the entire comedy scheme isn't half bad. Of course, there is room for improvement. There always is. In my opinion, Shining isn't acting too much like shining (except for the fact that he's being a total moron.) I think you did some nice work here, and I wish there was more like this. But there is something that confuses me: Wasn't Fleur a mare? Oh well. But yeah, I like the style, the joke, and all in all; Great work!
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I have to say that out of all of Monty Python's skits, I love this one the best. It is by far one of the most memorable, simply because of the absurdity of a military drill instructor letting his recruits go and do what they want to do, as opposed to having some discipline drilled into them.

That said, the fact that nearly the entire skit is rewritten, verbatim is a bit of a let down in this comic. There is a huge difference between a homage, and ripoff. The fact that the punchline of this comic rests in a line from Celestia doesn't change the Monty Python Transcript of the previous 11 panels. Joke still would have been gotten across if the idea and theme of the original skit was used in place of the actual "Marching up and Down the Square" skit.

There are two minor art problems with this comic that stand out the most. The first is a lack of different views in each panel. While I know it is common in flash animation to not change the position of the proverbial camera too much, part of the Charm of MLP is how well the show is animated and how reminiscent it is of the old Warner Brother's cartoons in terms of fluidity and camera work. That doesn't detract too much from the comic, but a simple way that the comic would have been more dynamic would have been to attempt to recreate the camera angles that were in the original MP skit.

The second is the second row of guards. I know you're trying to go for perspective here, by placing the back guards further up in the panel, however the problem is that the back guards are the same size as the front guards, which doesn't give the feeling of depth that I know you're trying to accomplishment. Very minor detail there, which is something that I know you'll be able to lick in future comics should you choose to continue creating them.

The end result as it currently stands is a hearty belly laugh. The idea of combining monty python and MLP:FiM isn't new, but doing this particular skit with Shining Armor is and for that I applaud your efforts here on making an entertaining comic.



And making me spit out my soda. ;)
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Richiewolf Featured By Owner 3 days ago
It's a monty Python thing, of course it's hilarious.
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CHICAGO-PD-STARS Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2015
INDEED!:lol:
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blackdog200 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2015
Hoof Trek.....Hoof.....Trek, i'd watch that
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skyshade13 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015
Oh gawd! I laughed the moment that I realized that this was based on the Monty Python sketch. Good work!
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LogicPony Featured By Owner Edited Dec 16, 2014
I can't believe that one stallion wanted to see After Equestria.  I'd rather be marching.

Also, Luna's just so damn cute when she's giggling.
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Maldrete Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2015
After Earth was positively an awful movie.
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:iconidreamofthewind:
IDreamOfTheWind Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Now we need Fluttershy in "Dead Parrot".
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:iconareebahruby:
AreebahRuby Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2014  Professional Artist
Love Luna's face in last panel! Thats totally me when my maths teacher is scolding my arch nemesis!!!
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:iconjamiboi:
Jamiboi Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I-I cannot breath! Oh my god, Why isn't Luna just on her back laughing! XD She has only two guards yet they do more than the army ACES! XD
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elr79655 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014
Nobody can beat the Pythons.
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:iconvector-brony:
Vector-Brony Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Unless it's a bunny rabbit
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:iconelr79655:
elr79655 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014
In that case, RUN AWAY!
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AskMerisstheSkeletal Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2014
i found the holy-hoof grenade!
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elr79655 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2014
One, two, five!
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:iconaskmerisstheskeletal:
AskMerisstheSkeletal Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2014
it's 3!
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:iconelr79655:
elr79655 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2014
Three!
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:iconaskmerisstheskeletal:
AskMerisstheSkeletal Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2014
-toss- :iconovariesplz:
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20thX5150 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So I guess the education for the military in Equestria is bad....very bad.
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babypauleen Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Student Digital Artist
IRON STALLION 3 MADE ME LAUGH XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
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Centurion1337 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014
Funny.

Everything of a toned down MLP version of Mr Creosote?
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Krysnha Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014
And i think the stormtroopers of star wars were the worst army in any fictional stori beaten by equestria army, that depends of six little girls for the defense of the country
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StormCutie Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Student Writer
Iron Stallion... lol... XDD
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YamanakaAngel Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
Monty Python FTW...this made me giggle so much...
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SHADOWSHAUN200 Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Luna's face killed me lol XD
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PonyUniverse Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hahaha XD!
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Ninjaspartankx5 Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Best captain ever.
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Leaf-Fairweather Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
Oh god, Luna's face XD...
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:iconpowerpuffgirl111:
powerpuffgirl111 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Is that Shining Armor with freckles?
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SQuietSonamy Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hehe, this hilarious! XD Oh Shining! 
Great job on drawing them =p Love the facial expressions as well! 
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ThePenVsTheSword Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student Writer
Love it!
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i-scream4u Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
LOVE IT!
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geekgirl2014 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
lol
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Shadeheart12 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I think it was luna who was in charge of the guards, and sense she been gone they gone wimpChuckle 
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SecretHunterX Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014
XD
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:iconsnapcentino:
SnapCentino Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Professional Writer
NO! Don't go see After Equestria!
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almightybooda Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
Had to read it with the accent
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BBBHuey Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

This made me LOL! Emoticon - XD Emoticon - XD Emoticon - XD 


Thank you!

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Marynote2002 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
how funnyGiggle 
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ScotchNvl Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love Luna's reaction to this. God she's best pony.
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FluttershyBrony13 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Student Photographer
:iconhappytwilightplz::iconhappyfluttershyplz::icontrollestiaplz::iconomgspitfireplz:
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Kingpin4682 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
let me guess, you're a monty python fan.
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xXArchiveOfTaniaXx Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Student Artist
lol i remember this!
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Nukacepm Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013
LOVE the Monty Python reference going on here!
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V4YGR3 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
xD
well thats a waay to friendly commander xD

its very funny indeed keep this up ;)
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weeya1 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013
I see what you did there XD
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:iconw0nderbolts:
W0nderbolts Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
no celestia, chrysalis is just stronger than you :iconchrysalisawesomeplz:
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MarissaSunshine Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
I could easily see what this came from.  Monty Python FTW!
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italy4eva Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
SO BEAUTIFUL. X3
Great job :3
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starlightforever Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Student Artist
oh my god i love luna's face
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Vector-Brony Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
perfect reaction 
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